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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 17th, '14, 10:03    


Sephiroth FanGirl

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Spica wrote:.___. ugggh. I've also heard of that movie. Very gross.

I know right D: definitely not something I would ever watch >.> I rather stick with horror movies such as The Grudge or The Ring or Dark Water (I like movies like that TwT)

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 17th, '14, 10:05    


Hibari97

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*whispers* Could someone proofread this for me and tell me whether the text is fitting the topic "joy"?

Edit:
Forget it.. .3.'

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 17th, '14, 14:08    


Sephiroth FanGirl

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Hibari97 wrote:*whispers* Could someone proofread this for me and tell me whether the text is fitting the topic "joy"?

Edit:
Forget it.. .3.'
huh? o.o but now I'm curious as to what you wrote! T.T

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 17th, '14, 14:15    


Hibari97

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it's in German anyway.. xD Google translator would make a terrible job.. but okay..

I didn't correct anything x'D

But at least she has forgotten what it feels like loneliness. What it means to be alone. What it means to suffer silently. But the palpitations she has forgotten. The moment in which she was so close to him. The uncertainty. The desire to be with him. The desire to touch him. Gentle and graceful she leaned forward and took a deep breath. She has forgotten everything. Displaces and wiped out, how happy they could be. - Could be for ever.
Fabrications. Because they know that it would only cause her pain.
Cruel stories of victory and defeat.
The moments where she felt alive were limited to the furious winds that raged in her heart. All the grief showed her that she is and the gravity tugged relentlessly at her. In her dream she coveted his senses with her to share. She counted silently to three, hoping for a miracle. One that could give her the strength to reach the sun. She prayed that out of a dreamer perhaps still so much more could be. Spreading out her arms and paused. So happy she wants to be. So satisfied, flows over to everything.
Leis she heard in the distance, as he called after her. He begged to fix his mistakes. And even as his voice echoed in her ears, the first tear flowed down her peach soft skin. "You know how it is to be so helpless? To be so powerless? "She cried hoarsely. "My word is void against the, heaven!" And what once seemed so precious now was now nothing more than worthless talk. An empty promise which arose out of their fantasies out.
"You said you'd come back again." Another time crawled the warm air in her clothes, played around her beautiful face. And their daring, their conviction grew immeasurably. "And I promised to wait for you," she whispered in line with the summer winds. "Until Cassiopeia us reunited. In the stars also you wait for me, so we flow together blood in blood back where we once lost to us. "A despondent smile graced her lips as she jumped. The darker it was around them, the brighter they would shine. Even before she opened her body collapsed down into many scattered beams so cozy and warm, soothing, as the day on which the life flourished in all the streets. Immediately, the whole passage was bathed in glowing red. The sky was on fire.
What was left of her filled the atmosphere. The purple mist lay over the paths, enveloped the sky, together with his sins like a samt'ger coat. Hid the secrets that slumbered so peaceful there.
Your feelings lay down to rest at last, as the last breeze threw the delicate red flowers in the air. And almost noiselessly much the ashes on the head of flowers, which covered the earth. Peaceful they lined the horizon and reminded again of what she really wanted to forget at any cost. He stood there, wrapped in bright light.
"You need have no fear." He said and walked away.

Thank you were born.
Thank you breathe.
Thank you live.
"When you no longer can, then close your eyes, open your mind and go to sleep. Jump on the calm that rocked your world. Hold on to the spark that kindled the fire and believe that it is a light, what the world free, in the knowledge that your will for these shadows is inviolable. If there is something which it is not worthwhile to strive - let it back "And the fear was lost in the resonance of their steadfast words that could not conceal even the sky..
Everything, everything coalesced into a huge, black canvas, which swallowed everything in it. And the colors with which they filled this gaping void published as Northern Lights on the horizon. Danced around the stars until dawn. By the time they found him in the red robe again. This went on for many nights. And every time he kept his word.

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 17th, '14, 17:17    


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I'm actually not quite sure what was happening and that could probably be both thanks to google translate and thanks to me being a bit to tired xD

but when it comes to if it would fit the topic Joy then hmm I'm not sure, in the beginning it felt like something sad was happening but as it progressed it felt both a bit sad but still gave the feeling of joy, like things were getting better but not really (hard to explain plus if you used google translate something could have gottan really out of hand there in the text and not be at all what you ment from the beginning xD), the end felt a lot like that, like it was getting better yet not o.o

I'm not really a writer myself (not a good one atleast T.T) so I'm actually not the greatest when it comes to giving an opinion in these things TwT and like I said before google translate could have messed things up xD

but I liked it and in a sense I guess it could fit nicely in to the topic joy :3

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 18th, '14, 05:06    


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Thank you, elaine!

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 18th, '14, 18:27    


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I don't feel comfortable critiquing translated texts unless they were well-translated with a reliable source. I feel that too much is lost in translation for me to give an accurate critique. D:

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 18th, '14, 21:49    


Sephiroth FanGirl

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I agree with Spica because like I said in my last comment some things could be not at all what you ment from the beginning and some things didn't really match up ^^''

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 18th, '14, 23:57    


Spica

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Google translate isn't too reliable either. Ever play the Google Translate game? It ends up like a game of telephone!

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 Post subject: Re: Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ We All Wish For Something - A Charity For Every
Posted: Jun 19th, '14, 11:05    


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Dropping by again to check if anyone's asked for a donation! XP

Aaaand ... do any of you remember the times when most of the posts were over-decorated like ...
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