Kingdom of Knuffel

Thankies, Mikael! 8D

I usually check for updates often, but meh.
I think I'll go find an old RP post with Alura and Tezz...

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Well, there are no new updates now, but of course, I'll have a few things to add tonight. I feel like I should do the meme on the front page for the sake of doing it... someone should start it, right? I've been kinda busy though, so we'll see when I have time to doodle properly. :X

I'd do the meme now, but I'm too busy with the projects I've piled on >>
Darn, I wanna post a chapter of my story for crit, but it's in the thousands for words...

Aha, yeah, I know how you feel.

Well, the "written works corner" is more like a sample of your writing, rather than the entirety of it. Betaing can be mentally intensive sometimes. XD

Oh, okay...Well, I've taken a bit of my second chapter in my Professor Layton story -that I need to work on again- thats 685 words 8D I can crop it down again, though.

Username: Webkinzfan12
Comments: This is part of the second chapter in my Professor Layton story. Marta is Layton's sister, and Lillian told him that she was in the hospital (and also said that Marta was her mother) Luke already despises her XD
Critiques: Sure, actually. Barely anyone reviewed on Fan-fiction, so I guess that added to my demotivation >> Would you like people to beta your works?]

Work: "Hello?" Lillian said, poking her head into the kitchen. She heard every word that Luke said, but decided to shrug it off for the time being. The two males looked at her, staring at her dress. She looked very different without her coat; she looked very slim. She was wearing a peach-orange dress that went to her knees, buttoned up and held tightly with a large pink ribbon at the back. Her sleeves puffed out, coming a little further than her shoulders, and under the dress lay a white, long-sleeved linen shirt. She still had her tie, though, and without the collar you could see much more of her face, which was currently blushing.
"*Ahem* Why, hello Lillian. Would you like some tea?" Hershel said in a cheery voice. Luke just looked away. "Yes, please..." She said in a strangely meek voice. "Alright, then, let's go to the living room." He said in a warm voice, placing a hand on her shoulder. He led her into the living room, where there was already a tray of biscuits. Luke came in behind them, putting the tea tray on the table. All three of them sat down, Lillian across from the two. The professor poured all three of them a cup, passing them to one another. Lillian took a sip of her tea, and sighed as the warm Belle Classic filled her insides. "This is delicious...Thank you, Luke." She said sweetly to the boy, who only replied with a nod.
"So, Lillian, how did you end up here in London?" Layton asked calmly after a sip of the Belle Classic, trying not to force the girl to reveal anything that she didn't want to. The girl took in another sip, and then spoke. "Well, mother received a letter from you telling of your departure, and that you'd arrive home today. Mother had to go to the doctor anyways, so we decided to come visit you. But, mother had to suddenly leave, and since she didn't know anyone other than you two that could watch me...so she dropped me off at the station." She replied, and then sipped the tea again. "Ah, so Marta has been receiving my letters. I've wondered if they were even getting to her." Layton said with a smile. He took in a sip of the Belle Classic, glancing over at Luke for a brief second. The boy stared at the Professor, and then glared at Lillian. The girl tried to ignore Luke, looking back at Layton.
"Lillian...How sick is Marta?" The professor said in a calm, low tone of voice. Lillian looked surprised, and then looked away uncomfortably. There was an awkward silence for a few minutes until Lillian cleared her throat. "U-u-Uncle...Remember that magnificent puzzle you gave me earlier? Well I also have one for you and Luke." She smiled, looking at the two. She sipped the cooling tea, and then spoke.
"Pronounced as one letter,
And written with three,
Two letters there are,
And two only in me.
I'm double, I'm single,
I'm black, blue, and gray,
I'm read from both ends,
And the same either way.
What am I?"
She finished, looking at the two, and then taking a biscuit from the tray. "Hm..." The professor said, closing his eyes and putting his chin in his hand. He thought the question over, as Lillian dunked her biscuit in the tea and nibbled it. "Aha! The answer is an eye." The professor said with a smile, solving the puzzle in about 35 seconds. "Ah! You solved it so quickly, as expected from the best puzzle solver in the world!" Lillian exclaimed, smiling wider than ever. "Definitely not the world, my dear," The professor chuckled, "But that was a fine puzzle, thank you." He then sipped his tea, and Lillian did the same. "Thank you, uncle Hershel...May I explore?" She asked once she finished her tea. "How about a grand tour instead?" Lillian nodded, standing up. Layton did the same, and taking the girl's hand, started to lead her upstairs.
Luke groaned, folding his arms. "I don't like that girl...Not one bit."

Added that to the front page and gave you a point for it. :) We will talk about point systems on the thread later... forgot if I said that. I keep repeating myself. XD

Anyways, give me a bit and I'll take a look at your snippet. >>b

I think you said that on the front page XDD

Meh, I can wait, no rush. I might post what I have so far of my third chapter later >>

Hmm, did anyone else's eggs not reset until late today? I couldn't find the new eggs untill 6-7 pm ._.

Ah, one advice I have on the piece is to start a new paragraph whenever someone is is responding to a part of a conversation. Having a group of people conversing in one paragraph tends to get confusing. XD

Overall, I think that it looks fine though, but as I've never played the game, I feel a little lost on the characters. XD I'm also not sure how often people read fanfics and how their popularity is measured.

Also, I think I've heard from one of my professors that of ten customers who have something to say about a service or a product, only three will mention something. That might be something you want to keep in mind for a review. I know that even though I like many pieces on DA, I comment on very few. XD;


Btw, since these literary pieces take up so much space on the front page, I'm probably going to only have one up each week (or at least fews days) before opening it up for a new work.

I was thinking about that for the art corner too --I think I'm going to have only three up at a time. :)

Oh, I was doing the egg hunt late, so I didn't notice.

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