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Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 19:00
by mishamonkey
Allright! So, I added some detail and thoroughly changed some of the rest.
How's it look?
Also, a quick explanation on the number and "green blob":
The thylacine became extinct in the year 1936 and the blob is a distorted map os
tasmania, which is where it survived until then. It had existed in Australia as well.
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 19:29
by amalath
I like his last stage, but most depends on how much you changed earlier ones, since similarity between them was biggest problem.
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 19:59
by mishamonkey
Click it to see the changes...
Also:
1-2:
Eyes lose the whites
Blush added on cheeks, shoulders and knees
Gets a nosey
Gets an earring
Gets an eyebrow peircing
Gets a tail
Hair grows in the back
Smiles
Gets pockets
2-3
Ears start growing in
Braid on side of the head
Skin darkens
Bracelet appears
Necklace appears w/ 1 fang.
Stripes come in
smile widens, more fangy
3-4
Skin darkens again,
stripes finish coming in
ears poke out some more
Eyes get some white around them
Anklet appears
ring appears
tail-tip goes a little white
more fangs on necklace
other braid in.
Number appears on shorts in dark green.
4-5
Skin darkens again,
little white earring comes in,
eyebrows get less fuzzy,
white around the eyes gets more striking,
hands and feet go pale
Belt added,
Anklet gets more loops,
necklace gets green beads between the fangs,
feather added to the earring,
Ears get dark fuzz,
1936 goes white
base appears.
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 20:26
by amalath
Ah, sorry. I'm slow today
I still think his tail and shorts could use more work. Make tail smaller/shorter in second, third, fourth stage, make it look like if it's growing. I think Thylacine tail is longer and slimmer anyway.
Also more changes in shorts like: stage 1: stay as they are, stage2: they get longer, stage 3: bottom part looks like rolled up, stage 4: add number, stage 5: belt.
Right now pants in stages 1,2,3 are almost the same, pockets are very minor change, adding number in 4th doesn't change much either. They are only clothes he is wearing, so it's important to make them stand out and change, playing with lenght and rolling up can do the trick for them.
I don't know what blush in second and third stage is for, if you don't keep it later. Since his chest is "empty" you might want to consider adding markings on it, maybe marks in shape of Thylacine foodprint?
On a side note: idk why, but I'd love suspenders on him X3
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 21:26
by mishamonkey
The idea was that he blushes where the stripes are coming in... also on the cheeks until the eyemakeup gets in the way. Else stage 2 looks.. well, off.
I changed him s'more....
He now finishes with overall-shorts... thanks for the suspenders idea! It's what led me to that.
I also slimmed out the tail and shortened it gradually in stages 2-4.
http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m157 ... e105-1.png
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 21:37
by amalath
Ah, I like way you changed it. Now you can add belt to 4th stage too. You can also add bit more stripes on his arms in last stage. Guess it wouldn't hurt to try and submit him.
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 21:58
by mishamonkey
Done and submitting.
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 23:13
by mishamonkey
It was rejected. Again.
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 23:28
by amalath
For the same reason? I have few more ideas how to change him, but from other side I don't want to change him too much >.< Okay, let's see...
- get rid of this blush. It doesn't add anything and is confusing when it disappears after few stages
- you might want to add some progress in hair between 4 and 5th stage. Like making them bit longer and adding 3rd bride.
- make change in his eyes slower. Like: first stage: boy with green/blue eyes, second stage iris gets darker, third iris gets black, white parts get light brown, fourth way it is now
- I'm trying to figure out what kind of top would be good to make it evolve into overall shorts later >.<
Re: Why was my Wild Knuffel rejected?
Posted: Mar 25th, '12, 23:42
by jacobgrey
I would say more changes between first and second stage. I found with a rejection I had, that it wasn't so much the number of changes, as the size of the change. So, even if you add six small things, if the overall look isn't much different it will still probably be a rejection. Just what I think from experience I guess!
